Could I get some Proof-Reading Please?

[Phil]

I posted in another thread about putting together the Queen Elizabeth II 1953 Omnibus set. Well I went ahead and put together a few Custom Album pages for it. Could I get a couple of you to look it over and see if you see any mistakes? Spelling, wrong denomination and what not? Or any comments or suggestions as well.

[youpiao]

The word "The" in front of Bahamas should be capitalized. This, from Wikipedia:

A peculiarity of the name is that the word The is a formal part of the abbreviated name and is, therefore, capitalised. So in contrast to "the Congo" and "the United Kingdom", it is proper to write "The Bahamas".

Tedski

[Phil]

Nov 29, 2017 18:20:13 GMT -5 youpiao said:

The word "The" in front of Bahamas should be capitalized. This, from Wikipedia:

A peculiarity of the name is that the word The is a formal part of the abbreviated name and is, therefore, capitalised. So in contrast to "the Congo" and "the United Kingdom", it is proper to write "The Bahamas".

Tedski

Well....... ok.
I guess I'll change it.

[mourningdoves]

I was a proofreader for an dictionary for a while: a slugging, take-no-prisoners proofreader. No heart. No conscience. When dangling modifiers see me coming, they jump. So here goes:

I’d probably write St. Kitts and Nevis; replace and with & if you like. In fact, I’d recommend it because it’s consistent with Gilbert & Ellice Islands, Trinidad & Tobago, &c.

Falkland Island Dependencies should be plural: Islands.

Gambia is officially The Gambia (with a capital T, as in The Bahamas and Tedski). That change was made to alleviate confusion with Zambia. But it wasn’t The Gambia when the stamp was issued, so it probably doesn’t matter. I just wanted to sneak in a shout-out to youpiao .

That place in Aden is Qu’aiti State of Shihr and Mukalla. I had to look that one up twice because transliterations from the Arabic usually leave out the u after the q (e.g. Qatar), but this joint does have it. You done good on Shihr; my wrists hurt just from typing that mess!

Aces on the Kathiri State as well.

I’d probably go Kenya, Uganda & Tanganyika and leave out the second comma. I love Oxford commas, but I can’t say I’ve ever seen them used in that name construction.

Malacca has only one l.

Negri Sembitan is Negri Sembilan.

Petrak is Perak.

The Malaysians apparently objected to Trengganu and now call the place Terengganu, but the extra e isn’t on the stamp, so as far as I'm concerned you’re cool.

[khj]

I see an image placeholder and then 5 images. I'm not sure how many images there are supposed to be, so I can't give you corrections by image number:

-- Cayman Islands
-- Gibraltar, not Gilbraltar
-- Jamaica, not Jamacia
-- Pitcairn Islands
-- Ultramarine, not Ultra (for Sarawak)
-- Yellow, not Yello (for Swaziland)

[Phil]

You people are brutal!

Just joking. Thanks for the feedback.
I'm trying to keep everything as consistent with The Scott Catalog.

[khj]

Phil, I added a few additional corrections to my post while you posted. Just working toward total brutality.

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[khj]

Just for me to be totally annoying, Scott has a persistent error that they stubbornly refuse to correct.

You may or may not want to bother to make this rather tedious correction:

The correct currency abbreviation in 1953 should be "d" and not "p" since the currency was 12 pence = 1 shilling. Scott has always used "p", unfortunately. The "p" abbreviation for GB stamps is when they changed to 100 pence = 1 pound in 1970. For some of the colonies/commonwealth, the "d" was changed to "c" as they converted from 100 cents = 1 dollar in 1969.

[Phil]

Jeez Louise!
Next time I want this kind of scrutiny I'll just ask my wife instead!

[Phil]

Nov 29, 2017 19:37:39 GMT -5 khj said:

Just for me to be totally annoying, Scott has a persistent error that they stubbornly refuse to correct.

You may or may not want to bother to make this rather tedious correction:

The correct currency abbreviation in 1953 should be "d" and not "p" since the currency was 12 pence = 1 shilling. Scott has always used "p", unfortunately. The "p" abbreviation for GB stamps is when they changed to 100 pence = 1 pound in 1970. For some of the colonies/commonwealth, the "d" was changed to "c" as they converted from 100 cents = 1 dollar in 1969.

That's true. I didn't even think about that.

[youpiao]

Here's another nit:

The line breaks inside the boxes are inconsistent. Sometimes the denomination is alone on the top line, other times it is denomination and color.

[youpiao]

Oh, and Singapore is missing the p or d or whatever, after the 10.

[khj]

Nov 29, 2017 19:56:23 GMT -5 youpiao said:

Oh, and Singapore is missing the p or d or whatever, after the 10.

Yes, it's supposed to be "10c".

You're obviously one of those who has no problems sitting in the upper deck at athletic events!

[mourningdoves]

Found another. You've got two boxes for Dominica on the second page: one in front of each of the first two lines. (Doubled and repeated words are the hardest to catch, and I'm not alone in saying that. If I get one, I know it's not skill, it's just dumb luck.)

I can't read the italic script inside the boxes very well, so I'll have to defer to my fellow brutes on the Stamp Brutes World Wide (should be one word) Forum.

[Phil]

A couple of those I caught. I'll get the updated/corrected versions up tomorrow. thanks.

[Phil]

Nov 29, 2017 19:54:23 GMT -5 youpiao said:

Here's another nit:

The line breaks inside the boxes are inconsistent. Sometimes the denomination is alone on the top line, other times it is denomination and color.

Believe it or not, I wanted that.
If the denomination is followed by a single-word color like Carmine or Yellow I'm putting it on the same line. If the color is 2-words, like red orange or dark green then I make another line.

[khj]

Nov 29, 2017 20:44:56 GMT -5 mourningdoves said:

Found another. You've got two boxes for Dominica on the second page: one in front of each of the first two lines. (Doubled and repeated words are the hardest to catch, and I'm not alone in saying that. If I get one, I know it's not skill, it's just dumb luck.)

At the risk of sounding overly totally brutal, I guess I should go ahead and point out that the "greater" problem is that there are spots missing for stamps that I normally consider part of this omnibus set (at least I include them in my set).

I'm wondering if Dominica might be doubled because maybe you skipped a line or two. For examples (I didn't pull out my set to check), missing are:

Bermuda
British Guiana
British Honduras

[youpiao]

So, now you want not only correctness, but completion? You're brutal, man.

[khj]

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[Phil]

Nov 29, 2017 22:10:09 GMT -5 khj said:

Nov 29, 2017 20:44:56 GMT -5 mourningdoves said:

Found another. You've got two boxes for Dominica on the second page: one in front of each of the first two lines. (Doubled and repeated words are the hardest to catch, and I'm not alone in saying that. If I get one, I know it's not skill, it's just dumb luck.)

At the risk of sounding overly totally brutal, I guess I should go ahead and point out that the "greater" problem is that there are spots missing for stamps that I normally consider part of this omnibus set (at least I include them in my set).

I'm wondering if Dominica might be doubled because maybe you skipped a line or two. For examples (I didn't pull out my set to check), missing are:

Bermuda
British Guiana
British Honduras

Looks like I completely missed those 3.  Fortunately the program I'm using makes it pretty easy to make corrections. 

Boy I can't wait until I let you guys  proof read the next project I make.